Tim, your Lockie assignment is very well done! You have used the essay format very well. Your reasons are sound, supported by a good use of evidence and the conclusions your draw are quite strong. However, you should have written the essay out without the labelling we used to plan the essay in class. You are clearly ready to do this and following this format will allow you to write excellent essays later this year.
I also very much liked your self-portrait and your thoughtful reasons for choosing the images you did. The care you take with your assignments is very pleasing to see.
Tim, your Lockie assignment is very well done! You have used the essay format very well. Your reasons are sound, supported by a good use of evidence and the conclusions your draw are quite strong. However, you should have written the essay out without the labelling we used to plan the essay in class. You are clearly ready to do this and following this format will allow you to write excellent essays later this year.
I also very much liked your self-portrait and your thoughtful reasons for choosing the images you did. The care you take with your assignments is very pleasing to see.
Well done!
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